Saturday, November 20, 2010


Inaki (ardent)
Eva (one who gives life)
Marcus (hammer)

Third person, limited. Get close on emotions and some physical experiences.


Napolean Otto bounced along in the rusty old jalopy with some discomfort. The plastic window coverings were missing, allowing the wind to carry heaping mouthfuls of dust into Napolean Otto's frowning face.
'I hate the outback,' he thought to himself in exasperation. 'This better be worth my time.'

Napolean Otto was a short man, not unlike Napolean Bonaparte, his namesake. Otto was still several inches taller, and much stockier than the legendary man. Otto had dark hair, a bushy caterpillar mustache and a hint of olive in his complexion. He was often mistaken as being Hispanic in heritage, but any careful eye could see his heritage was drawn down from Greece.

Otto had been a friend to Doctor Jack Price for some years now, though the two of them had not spoken in recent months. Otto assumed that Jack did not want anything to do with him after he introduced Jack to the love of his life, Mariana Richards.
It must have been February that we last talked to each other, Otto wiggled his large mustache in contemplation. I wonder what precisely Jack has been  up to.

Napolean Otto drove along the deeply rutted path towards the highest crest of the hill, where Jack Price's house was nestled behind some of the tallest scrub bushes around. 

Eva's writing exercise just was not working out for her. She had been trying to write about Doctor Jack Price for some time now, but found it unfulfilling, just like so many other things in her life. Eva heaved a great sigh, scrapped the current paragraph and began again. 

Just as Napolean was preparing to make the final turn onto the path that led to Jack Price's home, the radio in the old jalopy came on. The dispatcher that Otto had rented the jalopy from was needing it for transporting the prime minister in from the airport

Again, a dud beginning. Eva sighed, wondering if she should just stop and get back to planning her new room. The plans did not have to be done until Wednesday, so she still had some time. 

Napolean Otto wished he was not on a plane. He had never really like planes, but there were times when it was necessary to use one. He had boarded the flight in Detroit, made a change in San Fransisco, and was about five minutes out from landing in Sydney, Australia.
'I have been on this plane for too long,' Napolean thought to himself, rustling his caterpillar mustache. He huffed a sigh, tilted his head back and closed his eyes. He was not tired, but his eyes did not want to stay open either. The familiar ding, ding of the seat belt activation bothered him more than the average person would generally be bothered by such a plain sound.

He sighed again, quick enough to jostle the bristles of his thick black mustache. Napolean's mustache was peppered occasionally with stark white hairs. His wife always told him that he should dye it all one color, rather than letting it go slowly into a hodge podge of black, white, and gray. "It looks so messy when it is all different colors like that," she would bark crisply at him. She would never look him in the face when she said this, but insisted on it anyway. He would only wiggle his lip at her, to see if she would notice, but she never did.

Napolean Otto wiggled his lip in much the same way now, with that same mild irritation that he always tried to express in response to his wife's comments. He blinked slowly, settling into a fine squint that left him looking very angry indeed. The flight attendant stopped next to him just then, double checking for buckled seat belts and smiling in his direction absentmindedly. He blinked at her, and she gave a small nod in recognition.

"It will just be a few more minutes, sir." She finished off the comment with another practiced smile. Napolean was not buying it. He let his thoughts wander to his mission in Australia.

Doctor Jack Price had been a long time friend to Napolean Otto, and Napolean was not about to forget it. That was why Napolean was going to visit Jack now. Jack had returned from a mission trip for Doctors Without Borders about a month and a half ago, but Jack's working partner had not returned from her mission on her pre-determined date. Mariana Wilkes was approximately three weeks late in returning to Australia, and Jack was concerned for her.

Napolean was not sure exactly the relationship that Jack had with Mariana--they always claimed that their communications and interactions were purely for professional purposes only, but Napolean Otto was not very well convinced.

Napolean was jostled by a bit of turbulence as the plane descended further. He gripped the arm rests for security, and ground his teeth together in an effort to not let his nervousness show on his face. The gentleman to his right urged the woman next to the window to open it, so that they might look at the pink clouds. Napolean did not care about the pink clouds, and rather wished that the woman would not let herself be wooed by the man in the middle. The man was not good at making a smooth line delivery, so her reactions alternated between laughing at him and laughing with him. Napolean was more or less disgusted by it, but he remembered back to when he was courting his own wife, before they were engaged. It had been a fun time, a care free time. Maybe he should not be so quick to judge.

Before he knew it, the plane had touched down, and he stood quickly to collect his bag from the overhead cabin. No one ever dared to take space away from Napolean after he had stood up in the aisle. He was not a large man by any means but plump, and also had an intimidation factor that most people picked up on and also tried to avoid. His wife also told him multiple times that his mustache forced people away from him. Napolean did not mind one way or another what people thought of him and his mustache, but figured that anyone worth talking to would find that his mustache was not that intimidating after all.

Napolean Otto exited the plane quickly, thanked the pilot and attendants on his way out, and made his way toward the customs desk. After his passport was stamped, he went through security and found a beverage counter. The airport in Sydney seemed relatively empty for a weekend, but it could have also been the fact that it was still early morning, and many travelers may not be up and about. He ordered a water and tipped the clerk more than was necessary for such a small purchase.

Napolean walked further through the terminal before he found where all the people were sitting. Most had gone through preliminary security and were sitting by their required gate, waiting for their flights. Still, it seemed odd that so many people would sit still so consistently. The phenomenon made him uneasy, and he quickened his pace toward the exit. Napolean hailed a cab and gave directions to the driver for a small hotel on the western edge of town.
I should probably continue on to Alice Springs tonight, Napolean thought, sipping his water in the backseat of the cab. That is another flight though, and that last one wore me out.

Eva wished she could get the beginning right. That was what every writer wanted--to get their story right. She was beginning to feel light headed from all the sighing she was doing, and so gave up on that and started again. She decided to try starting from another view point. Perhaps that would work. 

Doctor Jack Price was a great man.

It did not work.
“Ugh,” Eva paused to rub the chill out of her fingers before putting them to the keyboard again. Her delicate fingers hovered over the black keys, unmoving. She bowed her head with her eyes closed and drew a long steady breath inward. 'This was supposed to be relaxing, not a chore.' Eva shook her head and saved the document anyway, closing the lid of the laptop quickly.

Eva left her part sun room and part office and strolled down the hall to the kitchen. It was a brief walk but the hall was dark, so she moved slowly. Eva had lived in the house for years but she still was not used to the narrowness of the hallway or the creaks in the floor boards. 

In the kitchen Eva poured herself more tea from the kettle on the stove. Twinnings was her favorite, but she had not had any shipped in lately. The flavor did not even matter to her, as long as it was Twinnings, she knew she had the best. She grabbed a yellow note pad from the small kitchen table and looked it over. On the first page was a note that Marcus had written her, ages ago. She touched her fingers lightly to the writing on the wide lined paper. The pencil marks were faint from all the other times she had run her hands over his sweet words. Eva sat the notebook aside and sipped at her Earl Grey tea. The taste seemed off today, but it was more than likely due to her bitter mood than the tea itself. 

Eva's cell phone rang, breaking up the despicable silence with an obnoxious ring tone. She only got that ring tone so that she would actually hear her phone. There was no way you could miss the annoying chant of "Um-ba-rella, ella, ella, ey, ey..." 

Eva picked her phone up from the old battered table, and looked to see who was calling. It was Inaki.

1 comment:

  1. You're freaking brilliant. That is all. For now.